Writing Prompt: 06-20-2014
Origin: “And Then There’s Us” by Labri71 on DeviantArt. As is fairly typical, I do not know this artist, so I would urge caution in looking up their other work.
Would you like to write something from this picture? I’d love to hear it! You can leave it in the comments, or move it to your blog and leave a link to your blog in the comments. Have a great weekend, readers!
[I really look forward to being able to read anything you write from this prompt, and I expect to enjoy it very much and for my readers to also enjoy it. That said, please keep everything as clean as it gets because otherwise I will delete the comment or link to your blog.”Only what is good for building up…” If in doubt, ask. My contact information is on the About page.]
It looks like that girl must have suffered something terrifying. I wonder what it was…What an interesting prompt!
As a side note, wouldn’t it be interesting if the girl was holding the boy all strong and protective like that?
I love the way the boy is looking over his head with his gaze so very intense. He looks like he’s mad.
That would be interesting, indeed! 🙂
I L.O.V.E. your blog! So cool! Looking forward to asking you to interview Serena (after I figure her out myself). 🙂 I’ll try to make something up when (if) I’m on the computer today and comment. Again, great blog!
Thank you so much! You just basically made my day (what’s left of it, anyway). An interview with her would be great! I look forward to hearing from you on both of them! I’m so glad you’ve enjoyed it here.
Sorry for this being kind of late, but here it is:
He wheezes another cough and tries to lift his hand to my face. He can’t quite reach it. I wipe my tears and grasp his hand. “Don’t go” I whisper. He smiles his soft smile and breaks into another coughing fit. I watch as the only brother I’ve ever had dies on the bed beside me. It shouldn’t end like this. We should have fought more, stronger. We should have given him the best medical care there is. Forget the cost. “Mel, you don’t get it” he’s struggling to say every word but I hear the softness in his voice. “I’m gonna be”-his body shakes as he coughs once more- “in heaven.” His eyes are as blue as they have always been, staring straight through me, knowing what is inside – fear, hurt, and anger. “Kris’ll take care of you”. I can’t watch him slowly fade away, but I have to. I watch as what’s left of the color in his face pales. He takes in a breath as if gathering his last strength to say the thing that really matters. “God… loves… you”. And with a last smile, he passes away. This is it. I stand up. I want to scream, to run away. This can’t be happening. As I turn to get out of the room, I bump into Kris. He holds me. And I cry out all I haven’t cried out yet. He is gone. My brother is gone. Forever.
Oh. This was good. Not late at all!
I liked how it ended with hope–“I’m gonna be in Heaven”– and with Kris to comfort her, but that it was a bittersweet ending. The ending was full of little short sentences, but I think that helped it to end strong. Keep up the good work! 🙂
Thanks! Do you like doing prompts?
I do! Some stories that are now very precious to me came originally from writing prompts.
Cool. I haven’t done lot of them, but they are pretty neat. And pretty short too, so I don’t have to worry about them too much. 🙂
Well… They’re supposed to be short. I tend to have a problem with keeping things short sometimes, though… I have a group of writers who I do Prompts with, and then we critique each other’s snippets, and one that I was writing from a prompt ended up coming nearly to three thousand… And I’m not done with it yet. :p For me, it’s definitely a challenge to keep them short.
3000? Cool! Maybe you can make into a whole short story. 🙂 For me, it’s easier to make one good scene that if it was in a story would require a lot of follow-up. But in prompts I don’t have to follow-up, which kind of lets my imagination go bigger. No “how-am-I-gonna-wrap this-up” thoughts, which is nice. 🙂
I plan on it. 🙂 Oh, yes. That makes sense. Recently I’ve decided to try and write Prompt stories as snippets instead of whole stories, and that seems to be cutting the length down considerably, which is nice.